Part two!

I think it is kinda short but I'm still getting the hang of writing stuff that i don't plan on deleting after five minuets.
I own Kelly
Bethesda owns Fallout New Vegas
I got the cover pic from bing images
Please tell me what you think so I can get better.
First you need paragraphing and to break up the text so that it's not a block of text, you've got some potential showing but I would strongly recommend proof reading your work and reading it out to yourself so that you know where to space it just right.
Practice makes perfect, never be afraid to do a lot of edits, proof reading and more. It does tend to drag out when you're doing all that, but it does help with improvement over time.
Hardly anyone reads my work so I know the feeling.